B2MEM 2012 - March 12th

[altariel]

The number called was N31.

My cards and prompts were:
Alternate Viewpoints: Helm's Deep
Poetic Forms: Acrostic

It walked the forests long ago

Hate filled their hearts as they waited and weathered.
Ents become wild, ancient wood-wardens.
Long their loathing smouldered unsated, till
Making their move, in darkness they drew
Saruman’s slaves beneath their branches.

Death they dealt out in the Deeping-coomb.
Early light came to a corpse-cleared valley,
Enemy-emptied, silent and still.
Peace lay like leaves on a land made pure.

Comments

[katlinel.livejournal.com]

*wallows happily in glorious alliteration*

[altariel.livejournal.com]

Love me my alliteration.

[curiouswombat.livejournal.com]

I am in awe of people who can write poetry on demand - and the alliterative style seems very Rohirric to me - just right.

[altariel.livejournal.com]

Thank you very much! I was really tired when I wrote it, and I wasn't sure whether I'd done the best job, so it's good to know it worked for you. I don't in any way think of myself as able to write poetry on demand - not like azalaisdep and her sonnets! I just like alliterating.

[watervole.livejournal.com]

Love the scansion and alliteration, but the third line feels wrong to me.

[altariel.livejournal.com]

Probably because of the enjambment. I doubt it's authentic, but I decided I wanted it: I liked the extra alliteration of "till" with the 't' in "unsated", a little hard sound to offset the longer vowel sounds at the start of the line. A small explosion after all the smouldering. Glad you liked the rest!

[azalaisdep.livejournal.com]

Fabulous. You may not have managed to make a drabble of it, but it's a hell of a lot better poem than my acrostic - genuinely powerful, and very Beowulf in the rhythm and all that gorgeous alliteration.

[is jealous]

[altariel.livejournal.com]

Oh, thank you so much, Az. I was so tired writing this so it's great to know it worked so well for you :-)