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Tonight I made [livejournal.com profile] mraltariel write me some drabbles. Here they are.



Five Moves that Denethor and Faramir Never Made by [livejournal.com profile] mraltariel ([livejournal.com profile] altariel helped)

1. Queen

The papers were discovered in some far chamber of the White Tower. After short consideration, the seneschal sent them to the Queen (it was well known that the King thought little of the game).

Arwen recognized their Steward’s hand at once – less graceful than in peaceful years. But another had sorted the pages, and annotated them, and bound them, and from his careful spider-notes the Queen revived the long war between father and son.

Year after year, the old man prevailed. And then, near the end – tragedy overtook him. The winning move was missed, and he fell before his foe.


2. King

“My wife thought you’d better have these.” He put the papers on the table between them. “She does have a question, if you would permit.” The King took it for granted that both the papers and the question would be known to him.

Faramir touched them gently and let out a long slow breath. “She wants to know about the game he lost.”

Aragorn nodded.

“She is not alone in that desire.”

“Do you have his correspondence? Maybe put together, they would solve the riddle?”

He shook his head. “I never defeated him, you see. He simply forbore to win.”


3. Captain

The summer was uncommonly wet. The messengers arrived heavy with rain-soaked leather and bone-dry instructions from the Citadel.

The board was stained from campaigning, but still serviceable, and the armies stood implacably across from one another. He had been considering the position for a week, but, however often he examined it, the winning move eluded him.

The courier stood expectantly, his satchel gaping, his eyes on the threatening clouds.

“I know, I know…” The pieces silently refused to help. “Blast you all.” The Captain quickly scribbled his move on the back of an old requisition form. What’s one more defeat?


4. Pawn

EXT. NIGHT. ABOUT TEN MINUTES LATER. THERE IS THE SOUND OF WATER FALLING.

“He’s blown it.”

“Knew he would.”

“He never sees the big picture.”

“Buried in the detail, see.”

“You can talk.”

“I know. But I’m just a courier. (BEAT) Makes you think.”

“Makes you think?”

“These are the people in charge of the f****n’ war.”

“Chess isn’t the same thing as war, you know.”

“No. It’s a ritualized encounter between master strategists, played out through the medium of boxwood.”

“F**k off.”

“I will. Got to take his latest effort back to the City.”

“He’s doomed. Again.”

EXEUNT OMNES.


5. Wizard

“Has he really written his move on the back of a request for socks?” Mithrandir chuckled, as was his wont. “It is not, if I may say, the best he could have made.” He rocked on his heels, his beard betraying the silent laughter that had not yet passed. “Poor boy.”

Denethor shook his head, almost imperceptibly.

“If he had used his Wizard, you would be in some trouble now.” Mithrandir’s eyes sparkled. “As it is, you have him if you move your Captain. There. See?”

“I shall play my own game, if it is all the same to you.”

Date: 2011-08-28 10:26 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] curiouswombat.livejournal.com
I really do love the drabbles - especially the one starring the messengers. Butt my first thought was 'Squee! Thor Nogson!'

Date: 2011-08-28 10:32 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] mraltariel.livejournal.com
Hooray! Thanks; I love Thor Nogson too.

Date: 2011-08-29 12:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] altariel.livejournal.com
It is the icon we use when [livejournal.com profile] mraltariel addresses the nation! ;-)

Date: 2011-08-29 09:24 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jhall1.livejournal.com
I like those. However I would say that they aren't five drabbles but one penta-drabble. :)

Date: 2011-08-29 10:53 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] curiouswombat.livejournal.com
I call them 'drabble series' when I write them - as each one is a complete scene - a pentadrabble would be one scene 500 words long.

'Drabble Series' is also the official Middle Earth Fanfic Awards description and I wouldn't dare argue with them!

Date: 2011-08-29 12:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] altariel.livejournal.com
'Drabble Series' is also the official Middle Earth Fanfic Awards description and I wouldn't dare argue with them!

:-) The Categorization Kings!

Date: 2011-08-29 12:59 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] altariel.livejournal.com
:-) I've heard a 300 word fic called a "tribble".

Date: 2011-08-29 10:17 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lindahoyland.livejournal.com
Most enjoyable!

Date: 2011-08-29 12:42 pm (UTC)

Date: 2011-08-29 02:51 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] telperion1.livejournal.com
Oh, wonderful! I hoped this would be chess!fic when I saw your HA post. The last one in particular was so full of life and pathos.

Date: 2011-08-29 05:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] altariel.livejournal.com
Glad you enjoyed! I might start using chessfic as a tag on my journal :-)

Date: 2011-08-29 06:12 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] fallingtowers.livejournal.com
Oooh, these are lovely! I think you should force Mr A. into fic-writing far more often. :)

Date: 2011-08-29 07:08 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] altariel.livejournal.com
I think so too!

Mr Altariel needs to write more of this

Date: 2011-08-29 06:33 pm (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
*wibble*

(And now back to grading...)

Dwim

Re: Mr Altariel needs to write more of this

Date: 2011-08-29 07:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] altariel.livejournal.com
I'm working on him...

Date: 2011-08-29 06:56 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] edge-of-ruin.livejournal.com
Oh excellent - well done Mr A! There can never be enough chessfic. Did Denethor ever play Mithrandir, I wonder? Saruman *shudder*?

Date: 2011-08-29 07:08 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] altariel.livejournal.com
Denethor would never let Gandalf touch his precious chess set. Gandalf would get bread crumbs all over the board, or jam, or else knock over his wine. "Oops! Ho ho!"

Date: 2011-08-29 07:17 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] edge-of-ruin.livejournal.com
Hee! Of course. He must have been a sore trial as a guest ;-)

Date: 2011-08-29 07:26 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] altariel.livejournal.com
Has the whole place reeking of pipeweed in no time.

Date: 2011-08-30 07:06 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] azalaisdep.livejournal.com
Oh, fab. I love them all - especially No 4, and the last lines of all of them...

And then, near the end – tragedy overtook him. The winning move was missed, and he fell before his foe.

Poor Denethor. These are underpinned by such tragedy and yet there's humour and love in them.

(It's slightly disconcerting to have someone whom I don't think of as writing fic wandering in, dropping those 5 little pieces of perfection on the table and then wandering out again!)

Date: 2011-08-30 03:38 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] altariel.livejournal.com
It's slightly disconcerting to have someone whom I don't think of as writing fic wandering in, dropping those 5 little pieces of perfection on the table and then wandering out again!

I wish he had more time to write.

Date: 2011-08-30 08:51 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lame-pegasus.livejournal.com
*applauds*

Those are cleverly woven, spirited and strong. He should indeed write more fic.

Date: 2011-08-30 12:54 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] altariel.livejournal.com
I agree :-)

Date: 2011-08-31 07:15 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] phyloxena.livejournal.com
Most entertaining :) For the sake of Gondorian ruling class, I hope the pawn was correct only incidentally.

Date: 2011-08-31 10:58 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] altariel.livejournal.com
Glad you enjoyed! I think the pawns speak a great deal of truth ;-)

Date: 2011-08-31 12:12 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] katlinel.livejournal.com
Tonight I made [info]mraltariel write me some drabbles.

Your skill as puppetmaster is admirable. As is [livejournal.com profile] mraltariel's in the writing.

Possibly it is shallow of me to have my favourite line be,“F**k off.” But what the heck, it is. After all, that's exactly what Denethor is saying in the last line, only he is having to do it in posh, innit.

Date: 2011-08-31 03:44 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] altariel.livejournal.com
He also made a lemon tart.

Possibly it is shallow of me to have my favourite line be,“F**k off.” But what the heck, it is. After all, that's exactly what Denethor is saying in the last line, only he is having to do it in posh, innit.

Hah, yes, completely!

Date: 2011-08-31 03:57 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] katlinel.livejournal.com
He also made a lemon tart.

That's just polymathically perverse of him.

Date: 2011-08-31 04:19 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] altariel.livejournal.com
He does make exceedingly good cakes. And drabbles.

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