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altariel ([personal profile] altariel) wrote2013-01-20 09:42 am
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Come athelas

The new captain made little impression.

Come athelas

Life to the dying
In the king’s hand lying


There was a new captain, the Lady Finduilas heard, but face-to-face he made little impression: another grim-faced silent man like all those who encircled her.

Then he took her hand—

A great man pierced with arrows lying in a coffin-boat slipping down the river. Fire in the city and fire in the veins of a young man burning on a sick-bed. And her lord, her lord – as strong as the stone of this stern city – with tears upon his broken face—

“Oh come,” she whispered. “Come.”

He became quite the favourite. And when he left, she knew hope had departed.

[identity profile] jhall1.livejournal.com 2013-01-20 10:13 am (UTC)(link)
Superb!

[identity profile] altariel.livejournal.com 2013-01-20 10:43 am (UTC)(link)
Oh, thank you!
kathyh: (Kathyh Aragorn sword)

[personal profile] kathyh 2013-01-20 03:46 pm (UTC)(link)
Beautiful. Love the last line.

[identity profile] altariel.livejournal.com 2013-01-20 05:09 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you. I wondered if that last line needed editing, so I'm glad I left it as it is.

[identity profile] curiouswombat.livejournal.com 2013-01-20 04:10 pm (UTC)(link)
I like to think that Finduilas had a happy care-free childhood - for I do not think she was ever completely care-free after she came to live so close to the palantir...

[identity profile] altariel.livejournal.com 2013-01-20 05:10 pm (UTC)(link)
So do I. She must have missed the Sea dreadfully.
zdenka: Miriam with a tambourine, text "I will sing." (freedom)

[personal profile] zdenka 2013-01-20 06:20 pm (UTC)(link)
Your writing is always so beautiful.

[identity profile] altariel.livejournal.com 2013-01-20 07:17 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you, what a lovely thing to say.

[identity profile] edge-of-ruin.livejournal.com 2013-01-20 09:04 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh beautiful and sad! So glad you're writing these.

[identity profile] altariel.livejournal.com 2013-01-21 05:00 pm (UTC)(link)
A little bookend for "Ariel".

[identity profile] dwimordene-2011.livejournal.com 2013-01-21 01:47 am (UTC)(link)
Ow. What a vision! Poor Finduilas, and her rather inarticulate hopes dashed by Thorongil's departure. I like that Denethor is her focus, if in part because she doesn't recognize the sons she doesn't yet have, I presume. It ups the irony quotient.

[identity profile] altariel.livejournal.com 2013-01-25 12:32 pm (UTC)(link)
That's exacly it: she doesn't know who these two grown men are. How sad!

[identity profile] windswept1.livejournal.com 2013-01-21 06:16 am (UTC)(link)
Ohhh.... this is sooo lovely!

[identity profile] altariel.livejournal.com 2013-01-21 04:59 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you! :-)