Oh, my, that was great. I like the way you make Melkor weirdly smart and perceptive about his situation -- from the pun in "we were instruments" he's irked by his idea that Iluvatar's harmony requires and even anticipates his own participation, even as a discord. Love too the way you start with "we" and end with "mine" -- Melkor's song enacts the appropriation that's the essence of his crime. *admires you*