I have to admit that as an atheist nothing gets me out of a narrative faster than people banging on about religion, particularly if it one of the patriarchal, proselyting religions, so I thought I ought to give your piece a read. :-)

It's an interesting piece, but like the commentator above I'm not too sure what I should be taking away from it. I've always seen religion as a focus of control and way of ensuring that people conform. In a sense your piece supports that, although you can say it also offers comfort and peace but I'd say that peace comes only by accepting the control exerted by the particular belief / religion. In Gridlock the hymn offer comfort but also stops people from looking beyond and asking why their life is as it is.

Anyway, as I said, very interesting.